Tonight, as the family watched Christmas with the Kranks-again-I was doodling ideas for Christmas cards in my sketchbook. Unfortunately, no one understood this one. They thought it was cute, but didn't understand what was going on. So, I'm looking for advice on how to exaggerate the action here. And in case you're wondering, one snowman is alive and is poking the other one to see if he is too.moleskine sketchbook, blue col-erase prismacolor pencil.
What I imagined first was that the one who is alive was desperately asking the other one to get a move on and follow him. I have no real advice to give you, you should leave it as it is since the difference between the two snowmen is quite obvious.
ReplyDeleteI didn't grasp what was going on instantly, either, I'm afraid! Maybe the one that's alive could have pulled the twig arm off the other one - or maybe he could be oblivious - walking off with his back to the snowman but holding the twig as if he were holding hands? That's slightly different I know, but all I can think of right now.
ReplyDeletei got it after your reading your text but it was a little unclear at the beginning... i think the live snowman's right finger pointing away threw me off... perhaps a look of curiousness instead of surprise might help too?
ReplyDeleteI thought the real snowman was shocked at finding the fake snowman. Perhaphs you could leave the drawing as it is because is it just lovely and what you want - then you could add two or three words (I can't suggest which words though ) to sum up what is happening.
ReplyDeleteI would be interested to see what you do with this.
The 'alive' one has to look a lot less like the real snowman---perhaps a lot more humanesque, might sell the idea---it's not any easy idea to put accross--it's really good drawing at any rate. winna
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I saw right away that one snowman is alive and slightly confused that the other one is not responding to him. It's great!
ReplyDeleteWhat's not to get? Great idea for a card. Maybe some clever text is all it needs.
ReplyDeleteMaybe if the living snowman had one foot raised to show he is in motion. Not sure, really, but I like the idea. Hey maybe if the living one was walking off, motioning for the other one to come on along. That's all I've got. I like the drawing though!
ReplyDeleteHummm, maybe the snowman on the right is to happy. He doesn't want to be a "real" snowman, he's already pleased with his life. This is tough because the drawing is so superb!
ReplyDeleteI think the drawing is great - but it needs a caption, like:
ReplyDelete"Man - wipe that grin off your face - it's been ten minutes since I told that joke!"
or,
"Okay, okay, you don't have to look at me - Give me the cold shoulder, see if I care! Stare straight ahead with that frozen grin!"
Well, that was fun. ;)
The snowmen are great! Add a caption "There was some magic in that old top hat..." or however the song goes. Just make sure the one not alive has a differen hat. I like it.
ReplyDeleteHi Raena.
ReplyDeleteHow adorable and humorous.
I got it immediately,
and I think most folks
would too.
No need to make changes
or add words, in my opinion.
Cheers.
I figured that the 'live' one was confused about the 'fake' one... but the finger poke I didn't get. One of the other comments mentioned the right hand pointing away, and I think THAT doesn't help at all... your focus is split :) Also the poking finger is not at one of the focus points- if you recentered the picture you might be able to force that as a point of focus :)
ReplyDeleteAnd I think a funny caption always helps ;)
Love the picture though!
the real fun, to me, is to see all these different interpretations, all these different stories. Your drawing is beautiful, it is calling for a suite...
ReplyDeleteWhat a cute idea!! I love it :) I thought the snowman was making the other snowman though. Probably if the index finger is more distinguishable? But I still like it! I don't know if you should change anything :) xo
ReplyDeleteWell I think it's a really cute card! I got the meaning right away!!! Love it:)
ReplyDeleteSo cute! My only suggestion would be to turn the "live" one a little more toward the "fake" one and maybe bend him over a little more and actually be poking the "fake" one.
ReplyDeleteI think it's a great illustration!
These snowmen are great! :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks for "following me" *grin*
Hope you are having a great holiday/christmas!!
Amanda